To strengthen my essay about happiness, I plan to incorporate the ideas of my classmates. So far we have had two days where we were able to help each other. One day we focused on our thesis’ and the other day (although morning classes got canceled and we were unable to meet) we focused on our rough drafts. Peer-reviewing is very helpful because it allows more eyes to see your paper in the ways that you haven’t. For example, I got one reference to add more information / a quote from the author to add to the beginning of that paragraph. Another one of my peer reviewer’s noted that I should sum up the main points in my paragraphs at the end of them. To do this I am going to rewatch my the point of emphasis in my argument in the Sanderson video so I am able to add more information about her regarding my connections. For the other helpful tip, I am going to go through my paragraphs, find my main topics, and figure out a way to wrap them up in a cleaner fashion.
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Going back to the texts to re-read/ re-watch, as you suggest, is always a good strategy during revision. And summing up the main ideas at the end of a section or paragraph is also a savvy move. Good!