After working on my essay during the weekend, I noticed that I needed to make some global changes to my technology essay. My first global change was becoming aware that I needed to incorporate more than one author into my body paragraphs, I believe that is partially where I struggled on our last essay. Therefore, … [Read more…]
I believe that my best example of peer review for this essay comes from Abby’s paper. I read her first draft of her essay and it is already off to a very good start. I was able to add a few ideas to hopefully help add strength and depth to her page. There was a … [Read more…]
Reading through my paper, after Professor Pahigian graded it, I learned many things. Something that stuck out to me from the beginning was that I can be redundant. One of my first comments were how I used such as and etc. in the same sentence, I should have stuck with such as and not included … [Read more…]
The main part of my revision process was my three global changes. The first one was how I needed to summarize the main points of my paragraphs. For example, a few of my paragraphs ended with a sentence that just flowed with the paragraph. After a helpful tip from a classmate a summarized the ending … [Read more…]
To strengthen my essay about happiness, I plan to incorporate the ideas of my classmates. So far we have had two days where we were able to help each other. One day we focused on our thesis’ and the other day (although morning classes got canceled and we were unable to meet) we focused on … [Read more…]
As I begin to write my essay, I will keep in mind Barclay’s formula. Using Barclay’s formula quotation, I will be able to use quotations correctly. Thus far, I have learned how insert quotes from the authors we have read. First, I begin with my own claim and introduce it. Then I insert the quote … [Read more…]
My still-evolving method of active reading/annotating has already shown improvement in my eyes. In Part One: Emerging, a huge topic includes arguments. Even in the few papers that we have been assigned, I have noticed that it is easy to state my argument in a clear and concise manner. I am able to do this because … [Read more…]
